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mganenko

Dear community,

For the last year I've managed to make a tiny open source project based on Arduino. Though it's open source, I'm going to recover some expenses by selling complete devices. I've made a web site, but before I share this project with wider community I need help.

I'm from Ukraine, so English is not my native language. My friend corrected my English, but I'm not sure whether I haven't done some obvious mistakes. As I read it again and again, it looks naive to me.

Could someone make a proof read of a page or two of the project website, please? Do you think something should be changed? Thank you!

Here's the link: http://bitcake.eu

Maksym

PaulS

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Could someone make a proof read of a page or two of the project website, please? Do you think something should be changed? Thank you!
Looks good to me. Neat idea.


KenF

Ok some suggestions.

Details page
To sound more natural I'd replace:
"9 LED candles flickering and going out when you're blowing on them"
With:
"9 LED candles flicker and go out when you blow on them"

I'd also replace:
"air trap hole"
With
Either: "air trap" OR "air hole"

This line contains an unreadable character (with Windows setup for English )
Size 42 x 42 x 18 mm, weight 30?g

This line contains TWO unreadable characters
Ulta low shutdown current (<1??A in deep shutdown)

Order page
Replace
"Write me email to order@bitcake.eu ..."
With:
"Send email to order@bitcake.eu ..."

Just Remove:
(which I'll ask at the post office) (sounds very amateur)

Replace:
"Write me again and specify your address and the payment method details"
With:
"Contact me once payment has been made to confirm details"

Software Page
Looking at your code I find
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#include .h>
This needs sorting :)

Otherwise, not too bad.

mganenko

KenF, thank you very much! I've fixed the website except for includes which I'll fix with the next code iteration.

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